Essay revision

revisions are needed.

The section on Baldwin is on the right track – make sure you address the major point of his speech – the systems of reality and the effect that racism has on that.

You current critique of Baldwin’s argument is a bit problematic.

I would encourage you to watch the debate again before revising your essay (or reading the transcript) in order to identify Baldwin’s central claim, and formulate an objection.

Your own position is very interesting, however it seems to me that the relationship between racism and colorism is not made explicit.

I would encourage you to look up some of these terms, e.g. the word monolithic, because I’m getting the sense that there is some confusion going on here.
Also, think about whether your definition of racism as colorism is a bit too narrow.

MORE IN THE PAPER ITSELF

USE THESE TWO LINKS ONLY WHEN EDITING!

Your essay should focus on the account of the nature of racism offered by James Baldwin (racism as a violent distortion of a ‘system of reality’);

https://www.esquire.com/news-politics/a23960/james-baldwin-cool-it/